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March 23, 2012
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Make
NIKON
Model
COOLPIX S570
Shutter Speed
10/2500 second
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F/2.7
Focal Length
5 mm
ISO Speed
125
Date Taken
Nov 4, 2011, 10:50:55 AM
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COOLPIX S570V1.0
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Look up to the sky by forgetyourwoes Look up to the sky by forgetyourwoes
This was a picture taken from where I was standing in the ticket line. All I did was look up with the camera and snap the photo. Just stunning, if you ask me.

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How can I make this better balanced?
Is the dark border too overwhelming?
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I think this is quite a neat idea. I really like the black framing and the black crisscrosses over the building. It's a very original shot.

I would suggest maybe bringing up the saturation and/or putting up the contrast to make the building and the sky stand out more against your black background. I would also perhaps suggest cropping the right side and a bit of the bottom of it down so your piece doesn't get overwhelmed by the black border. To me there is too much negative space in the picture and this takes away some of the attention from your actual building.

I hope this helps.
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I think there is nothing wrong with the balance here. With all the geometric shapes, I like how asymetrical the piece is. It's quite interesting how the window panes form almost a perfect rectangle with the mirrored reflection on the building on the left. I'm not sure if that was your intention, but this stems solely from the angle at which you took the photo so kudos. :lol:
If anything, you might be able to improve on composition; the location of the open sky and windows in the piece to sort of balance out the negative and positive space. That will also help deal with the issue of the dark border so that your piece isn't lost in the border. =P The darkness is effective in emphasizing the light sky, so it doesn't seem too overwhelming. However, it looks like there are also some interesting stone textures wherever you were, so really it's up to you; keep it dark to emphasize sky, or lighten it up to reveal more of the foreground. Personally, I believe it looks good like this :)
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
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This is a really neat idea. Good eye!

I think cropping out some of the negative space is definitely a good idea to help balance your image. I'd also suggest playing with the title to give viewers a suggestion of what you were thinking when you took the picture. Titles give personality to your work. :) :+fav:
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forgetyourwoes Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Student Filmographer
Thank you so much for your feedback!
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djpimpslap22 Featured By Owner May 5, 2012
beautifulness!
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forgetyourwoes Featured By Owner May 6, 2012  Student Filmographer
Thank you! :)
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djpimpslap22 Featured By Owner May 6, 2012
your welcome!
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